Shrugging and Sighing and Smiling, Oh My!

I’ve only been at this writing thing for a short time. The mistakes I continue to make are still quite amateurish in nature. My first draft is peppered with way too many shrugs and sighs, smiles and frowns, laughs and nods, and it’s agony reading the manuscript aloud and crafting new ways to move the story along.

Wedding at the Happy Valley Motor Inn and Resort is in the final stretch of editing and revising, but I still have to ferret out all the overused words. It’s too bad there’s not a random word generator that would automatically substitute a more unique or seldom used word into a work in progress. (Note to self: use ferret occasionally.”)

Action beats, such as “Paula folded a dishrag and slung it over her shoulder,“ work well in place of shrugging and sighing and smiling, etc., but the caveat there is in not crossing over into stage direction and/or telling vs. showing. I have to confess, I’m a teller. Showing is so hard.

I seem to take two steps backward for every step forward. I blame my background in teaching and training. So why do I keep writing? For the joy of screwing up, I guess.

I’m on my second read aloud pass through. The number of smiles is declining; however, I’ve noticed that grins are on the uptick. Coincidence? I really doubt it.

Peace, people!

Maybe I need a dog…the cat’s useless.

Author: nananoyz

I'm a semi-retired crazy person with one husband and two cats.

14 thoughts on “Shrugging and Sighing and Smiling, Oh My!”

  1. You know I’m modeling what I’m doing after you, right? This is a hoot. Creating these characters – I’m remembering how you made your characters so incredibly believable in an absolutely wacky situation.

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